Poetry: A Country Bed: Teen

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Title: A Country Bed.
Length: 64 (poem) 500 (poem + prose)
Rating: Teen (poem) Explicit (prose)
Notes: Holmes/Watson. Sleep sex. POV Holmes.
Summary: Holmes and Watson share a bed in a country inn.
Author’s Notes: I am participating in KINKTOBER 2017. One of the three possible prompts for Day 1 is Sleepy Sex. I know the prose won’t be most of the comm’s cup of tea so here’s the link to the full ficlet, but I did want to show off the poem (as I am on a bit of poetry kick). It is a trine in French heroic line or Alexandrine. And I was struck by (and thus included) the phrases in the definition for the latter: the hemistiches must be equal and complete and the caesura must be absolute.

A country inn slumbers. A reverie begins.
An interloper lopes. Musts knead as Queen Mab spins.
Lover stands, contemplates. Lover abed awaits.
Key’s afore entrusted. Line ‘twixt thee, me ablates.
Country bed-springs squeak, groan. Now thee with me replete.
Hemistiches equal. Hemistiches complete.
Observed revels disturbed. Observer studies, spends.
Wrapped in dreamer, dreamt sleeps. A country night abates.
Caesura’s absolute. Lusts, once burst, deplete.

Comments

[scfrankles.livejournal.com]

I love your use of language in this ^__^

I must pick out line 2 especially: An interloper lopes. Musts knead as Queen Mab spins. And within that line Musts knead - I like that a lot.

[okapi1895.livejournal.com]

Thank you! Yes, that's the gem, imo, too. Also I added title. Sorry.

[thesmallhobbit.livejournal.com]

Another excellent poem!

[okapi1895.livejournal.com]

Thank you!

[debriswoman]

Impressive use of language:-)

[okapi1895.livejournal.com]

Thank you!

[gardnerhill.livejournal.com]

Awww. That's adorbs.

[okapi1895.livejournal.com]

Thanks!